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Morning @sonim,
This piece of writing is lovely. You raise some interesting points and your descriptive writing is moving. You’ve used some excellent vocabulary and managed to talk about a complex issue fluently in English. Excellent, really!
Notes;
> when we talk about an artist’s work, we don’t need the article ‘the’:
NOT – Though the De Bottom’s extract ….. and ….effects as the Hopper’s paintings….
BUT – Though De Bottom’s extract … and ….effects as Hopper’s paintings.…
* unless we talk about in the singular e.g. The Hopper painting, ‘The Lighthouse…’, is …..
> As most of the human being, > it sounds more natural to say, As most people, …. (or As most human beings …)
Can you try and correct these?!
> I’m used to run all the time
> Finally, I don’t know any other artist that communicate
