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Top marks on this @Andrea.Grassi well done:
✅ you used your own words
✅ you identified the main idea
✅ you found relevant ideas & omitted irrelevant details
✅ you kept the meaning the same
✅ you used attributive tags
✅ you kept your opinion out of it
Let’s have a look at some corrections:
>Polish needs a capital letter
>I suggest these changes, including a word order change, to make easier reading:
At the same time, a chunk of the story is dedicated to her personal scandals. As the author describes, Tamara was known for her crazy parties and sexual appetite which ALSO led to THE breakup with HER husband.
> I suggest these changes, try not to make your sentences too long:
Emma tells us how (delete:then) her work started to decline because of the rise of Expressionism and, although Tamara tried to adapt to this new style, it didn’t help her fame anymore. She lived the last part of her life with HER daughter and didn’t do any further exhibitions.
> The conclusion is good, but if we add a few commas and the word ‘it’, it would be even better! Where would you add these?
The author ends the article talking about the renaissance of her work that got picked up again around the 70s and now after her death in 1980 is extremely popular amongst celebrities.
