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Activation project: storytelling
I’ll never forget that day! So my husband and I were preparing to attend our friend’s wedding one month following ours. I was applying my makeup and thinking about what to do with my nappy-looking hair when I noticed his shoe laces and decided to use them to do an “updo hairstyle”. And the funniest thing was that i had just finished tying my hair when he entered the room to get his shoes. And guess what? I used his shoe laces of the shoes he wanted to wear to tie my hair up . When we made eye contact , we burst out laughing. Finally, he helped me find something else for my hair.
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Ahahahaha!!! Love this story! Well-written too – nice vocab and almost perfect grammar 🙌
I have just a few notes for you:
I’ll never forget that day! So my husband and I were ❗️preparing❗️ to attend our friend’s wedding one month following ours. – it sounds more natural to say “getting ready” ✅
…the funniest thing was that i had just finished tying my hair when he ❗️entered❗️ the room to get his shoes. – This is non incorrect, however, a native speaker would say “came into” 😉
I used ❌ his shoe laces of the shoes he wanted to wear to tie my hair up . When we made eye contact , we burst out laughing. – I need to use a tense to show that this action happened first. Which tense do you think?
❗️Finally❗️, he helped me find something else for my hair. > Better to say, “In the end….” 😍
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