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An email to a colleague – new software release
Dear Francesco,
I hope you are well.
We are going to release a new software version next Monday 4 October and there’re some tasks to do before this date.
After a quick meeting with our developers, they told me that we need more space inside the server in order to allow our customers uploading some video, moreover we need that the website will be offline for a while because we have to test it after the release. Do you think you could help us coordinating these activities with your team?
Let me organize a meeting for the next week, I’ll send you the invite in the next days.
Thank you very much for you help.
Best regards,
Mattia
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1 Reply
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This is super work @Mattia.Rosi Well done!
✅ you have explained the reason for the request
✅ you’ve stated the deadline
✅you’ve given dates clearly
✅ you’ve made your request polite
Some grammar points:
>to allow someone TO DO something (infinitive)
> in order to allow our customers uploading ❌
> in order to allow our customers to upload ✅
> At ‘moreover’ take a new sentence (remember, we English speakers like shorter sentences 😂)
and change the structure (we don’t really say: we need that… )
> Moreover we need the website to be offline for a while because we have to test it after the release.
> help someone TO DO something (infinitive)
>Do you think you could help us coordinating these activities with your team?
>Do you think you could help us to coordinate these activities with your team?
👍 Really happy with this Mattia, keep going!
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