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Writing Task – Diplomatic English – Feedback
Dear Karin,
Thank you so much for your invitation. I was honored to be considered as one of the tutors in this very exciting training programme.
Unfortunately, my schedule has already been occupied with another upcoming event. I am afraid I wouldn’t join this programme. I would like to suggest that you contact my colleague, Jane. She is my colleague in the same company and very experienced on this field, I am pretty sure she will be a great replacement. I can support you if you need her contact details.
Please let me know if I can assisst you any futher.
Kind Regards
Filiz
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1 Reply
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Hi Filiz,
Very good work here, well done. Here are some things to note:
Tone: you have sustained the correct tone and register throughout this email. Excellent.
Grammar:
“I am afraid I wouldn’t join this programme.” – if you use ‘wouldn’t’ here, it sounds hypothetical and may confuse the reader. Better to be firmer and say: “I am afraid I won’t be able to join this programme.”
Vocab:
She is my colleague in the same company and very experienced on❌ this field
We say: experienced in something. Therefore: She is my colleague in the same company and very experienced in this field
Spelling TIP!:
honored – just to highlight this. it isn’t a mistake, but it is the American spelling. When you write in English be sure to choose either American or British English and be consistent throughout. (UK=honoured)
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