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  • Writing Task – Diplomatic English – Feedback

    Posted by Filiz on January 28, 2024 at 9:45 pm

    Dear Karin,

    Thank you so much for your invitation. I was honored to be considered as one of the tutors in this very exciting training programme.

    Unfortunately, my schedule has already been occupied with another upcoming event. I am afraid I wouldn’t join this programme. I would like to suggest that you contact my colleague, Jane. She is my colleague in the same company and very experienced on this field, I am pretty sure she will be a great replacement. I can support you if you need her contact details.

    Please let me know if I can assisst you any futher.

    Kind Regards

    Filiz

    Kerin replied 2 months, 3 weeks ago 2 Members · 1 Reply
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  • Kerin

    Administrator
    January 31, 2024 at 3:26 pm

    Hi Filiz,

    Very good work here, well done. Here are some things to note:

    Tone: you have sustained the correct tone and register throughout this email. Excellent.

    Grammar:

    “I am afraid I wouldn’t join this programme.” – if you use ‘wouldn’t’ here, it sounds hypothetical and may confuse the reader. Better to be firmer and say: “I am afraid I won’t be able to join this programme.”

    Vocab:

    She is my colleague in the same company and very experienced on❌ this field

    We say: experienced in something. Therefore: She is my colleague in the same company and very experienced in this field

    Spelling TIP!:

    honored – just to highlight this. it isn’t a mistake, but it is the American spelling. When you write in English be sure to choose either American or British English and be consistent throughout. (UK=honoured)

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