Kerin
Forum Replies Created
-
@chiara I loved reading this account and imagined having a tea together discussing it! Extremely well expressed Chiara, I don’t think this task is in any way easy, especially in a second language. Your writing is fluid and your vocabulary is perfect.
I’ve written a note on a few things to check, but I think I’m being a bit picky. I really can’t say enough how good this piece is.
(ps. I, on the other hand, would love a Hopper hanging on my wall … it appeals to my moodiness… I find such comfort in melancholy. I’m such a weirdo 😂😂)
-
I think that’s spot on @Gabriela – in general we are apprehensive of the unknown. It’s human nature I imagine.
ps. spelling> leaving (maybe it is just a typo)
-
Excellent Carla! Nothing vanilla here 😂
-
When reading this article I thought a lot about music! In my life span, I have gone through records, cassette tapes, CDs, mini-discs, I-pods and now streaming … all those changes in my short life. It seems frivolous, but I think it represents the point you rightly make – development is fact, whether we like it or not.
And I couldn’t agree more with your second point, if only technology were available to all… I fear I won’t see that in my lifetime!
A few notes:
> as scary as IT may seem
> Are we prepared …
> get LEFT behind
-
Wow @Adriana … an explosive 10 years! Living life to the full! Thank you sharing your experience with us.
🌸Some notes:
Well done – you use the past simple correctly and the fluidity is great.
Some corrections:
> my 30th birthday
> buy is only a verb, so you can say ‘the purchase of my new apartment’ or ‘the buying of …’
> looking back (without to)
> I’ve change all – better to say: I’ve changed everything (see this for more info)
> living so far of my family and my son – ‘so far from my family’ or ‘so far away from’
> Am not sure what you mean by ‘incisively’ .. can you find another word here?
-
Agree completely about laziness and fear @Carly. Some people are so set in their ways, the idea of change is alien.
-
@Carly, thank you for being so candid. It’s not easy to share these things. It’s very brave that you bit the bullet and went to counselling. I understand your reluctance about getting help. Growing up in the north-east of Scotland, it was built into me that we ‘deal with our own problems’, a ‘grin-and-bear-it’ type attitude, but I know so many people who got the right help through therapy and perhaps without it, their story may have been so different….. I’m so glad it helped you….
ps. In this period I’m trying to allow myself to feel sad without feeling guilty! So I loved what you wrote: “…but I also enjoy a cloudy day.”
>
I lost steam is correct. You can also say: I ran out of steam – which would be more common in BrE
Admit (probably a typo) 🌸
-
@ru
-
@ru
-
I was thinking the same things @rubina … it has been a wake up call for us and I only hope that we learn from this and don’t immediately go back to all the things we were doing to kill our planet! (PS. Earth (terra) Heart (cuore))
About art: I agree completely. Where did you take these pictures? Amazing 😱
English corrections – two important things to correct. Please see images below.
-
Wonderful job @Vale – (how long did that take you?!)
-
@chiaramig – this is what I mean. You probably already do it!
-
@Gabriela that’s funny… when I was reading your description about your house that was ‘relatively isolated’ I was thinking …it’s my dream! Last year when we moved to Como, we had about 3 days to find a flat (and it was slim pickings I assure you!) Anyway, really out of desperation we chose the flat we are currently in. I can’t stand it. When I look out the window I see into all my neighbour’s flats, and we are sandwiched in between and under noisy families … I feel like we are in fishbowl! Cannot wait to make a change!
I’m very happy for you that this big change gave you a new lease of life – it sounds exciting that you can go on your paddle whenever you want and enjoy lake life. As for modern buildings, I have had a similar experience. I love the feeling of old buildings but the comforts of new builds are unbeatable.
Notes: this piece is very well written and enjoyable to read. Honestly I only have two corrections to make.
> instead of ‘settlement’ I’d use ‘development’ (as in housing development). (We use settlement to describe historic places that previously had been uninhabited, and then people established a community.)
> In this phrase: First of all because we finally have had neighbours > it is sufficient to use the past simple: First of all because we finally had neighbours
Excellent work👍
-
@Chiara thank you for sharing your perspective. I enjoyed reading that very much and I think your point about a ‘silent bond‘ is spot on.
Actually, you made me realise something that I hadn’t really considered before🙏: ….occasion for raising new curiosities and for longing for knowing more about the artist and what has inspired him in creating his art. For me personally, I usually need the history behind the art in order to enjoy it fully. In fact, I am not a fan of contemporary art at all. It gets on my nerves because I rarely understand it.
Instead, I am obsessed with modern art and I think it has a lot to do with the history and stories from that era. (I am also obsessed with literature from that period too now I think about it … maybe I’ve been reincarnated from that period 😂)
Feedback
It is a lovely piece of writing. There isn’t much to say, just these few points:
> instead of an art addicted > either ‘an art addict’ or ‘addicted to art’
> to sound more natural ‘…. normal and due sightseeing….’ > ‘… normal and obligatory sightseeing…’
> Artistic creations are something that have ever been existing in any society, > that have always existed (Let me know if you need that explained!)
Great job! 👍
-
Well done @rubina!
He told me they are used TO pronouncing (to be used to +ing)
-that bother him! > bothers
