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@victorpereira this is BRILLIANT! Not only is it rather amusing, you’ve got the use of the slang and colloquialism spot on – it really sounds so natural. Well done.
In blue you’ll find my suggestions to make it more natural sounding. I’d like you to try and correct the parts in red. I’ve sent you a link to the writing code.
Have a go and then I’ll help with the parts you can’t figure out, ok?
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Good vocabulary work @Vale
⚠️ 3. … I’m able to TEAR through it …
4. Ive just read the Maurizio De Giovanni’s lates book. > you don’t need to use ‘the’ and I think lates is just a typo > I’ve just read Maurizio De Giovanni’s latest book.
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So interesting @valeria.maraviglia thanks for sharing. I have never had the opportunity to visit China (it’s on my bucket list!). What an experience!
What you’ve written is very well expressed. Here are a few pointers to make it even more fluent!
TIP! When you use words and phrases that indicate that you’re about to present an important fact or idea, use a comma:
In my opinion, On the other hand, personally speaking, For instance, However etc etc
The comma helps to introduce the idea and signal a slight interruption in the sentence, so it will read and sound more fluent.
> well-recognized – replace with well-known
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Fascinating @onorati66 I had never heard of Eurish! What an amazing experience to have had. I had a similar experience when I worked at DEFRA in London (which is like the Ministry for agriculture and environment) People were from all over the place and of course had wonderful accents and new ways of saying things. It was a magic time.
Only this to point out:
on the other hand (DELETE: the) most of movies, series and music …
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Morning @Vale – excellent use of the vocabulary.
Just this to note:
> I’d rather Mystery novels … watch out here: I’d rather + verb
Therefore: I’d rather READ Mystery novels or I prefer Mystery novels …
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I saw one in the MOMA and it captured me for ages!
Please have a look at the corrections. I have sent you the writing code in the messages. Please try to correct what you can using the code and ask me anything you need help with or clarification about.
1. This sentence is long and is a bit confusing because of the complex grammar. It should read like this:
The first time I saw this painting, I was reading an art book for children, and little did I know that it would become my favourite painting and that I was going to buy a book about the artist written in French just because it had a picture of this painting!
2. but there was also something pleasant about it.
3. in dreams everything can be as we want it to be
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Very clever & amusing @victorpereira !
I was imagining Tim Roth playing one of these characters!
Let me give you a few pointers:
> I can’t remember when was the last time this happened, > I can’t remember the last time this happened or I can’t remember when this last happened,
> I betcha a tenner that this two sandwiches short of a picnic baldy couldn’t grow HIS hair even with the best fertiliser.
> focus ON
> he felt in 3 seconds unconscious -wrong verb! Can you fix it?
>Baldy turns your head to the light and outshines both of them, – the time and the pronoun are wrong. Can you fix them?
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You don’t double check?😱😂
All correct @Paolo – good.
> sure is … I wouldn’t use it to introduce a topic. It can be used as a response, like this:
“It’s a lovely day.” “Sure is!”
In this case, you’ve used Of course … which works well. Alternatives could be: For sure … (informal, not in professional writing) Certainly, Without a doubt …
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Hi @lucia (Happy new year!)
Thank you for this piece of writing. I personally find the painting both stunning and disturbing, which unsettles me somewhat! I think your piece is incredibly insightful and as I was reading it I was thinking “I could never express myself in this way in a second language!” Well done.
I only need to highlight a few things to help you improve:
> is full of light’s and colour’s contrasts should be is full of light and colour contrasts
> I think that in considering the meaning of the artwork cannot be neglected what it really is:
it is better to use the active voice here and because it is a fairly long sentence, a comma will help the flow: I think that in considering the meaning of the artwork, we cannot neglect what it really is:
> like Romanticism or Neoclassicism ones > delete ‘ones’ (not necessary. When we use ism noun, the meaning is explicit)
> the nature – delete ‘the’ (these bloody articles 😂)
> This is coherent with the Courbet figure, since HE was (probably just a typo!)
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Great Job @Paolo 👏
Watch out for this:
> word order: England lost bloody 4-1 to Germany > England bloody lost
> a few sandwiches out of a picnic > a few sandwiches SHORT of a picnic
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Thank you for your task @sabri & Happy New Year!!!
If you have time (and voglia!) I would like you to try and re-write it, having a look at these notes.
1. new is an adjective whereas news is an uncountable noun. That means we don’t use ‘a news’ and it is considered third person (the news is, not the news are)
2. wrong word: suspect is a noun or verb. The word you need here is suspicion
3. This sentence should be: decide not to give them to their children
4. better to use people than persons
5. verb agreement
6. This sentence should be: The only method to check the trustworthiness of a piece of news is to consider and evaluate the origin, the source, and not give importance to pseudoscientific journals.
7. wrong word: warranty > guarantee
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Thank you for sharing @Paolo
You are 100% right – it’s part of ‘every day life’ language (Therefore I consider it an extremely important part of learning if you really want to understand native speakers). I understand your disappointment, but ‘piano piano!’ a little at a time. Start actively noting down new slang – if you realise you start hearing it a few times, it means it is high frequency – therefore, worth learning. 👍
Please have a look at the corrections. I have sent you the writing code in the messages. Please try to correct what you can using the code.
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Well-expressed @onorati66 and some nice use of vocabulary – it was a pleasure to read. (I think you could be right about the school programme being Eurocentric). I completely agree with you – I think he caught the anguish of normal people in a post-war world – universal emotions.
Let’s have a look at some corrections:
> harduous – spelling > arduous ✅
> art’s history – we use this as a compound noun > art history ✅
> Neither have I happened to see his paintings in ANY museum or art exhibition
(You must use present perfect here – do you know why?)
❌ he stayed clinged to the painting as a figurative art
⚠️ Cling is an irregular verb: cling, clang, clung
✅You can either say: he stayed clinging to …. or he clang to ….
He swimmed against the tide? – great expression. But swim is also irregular:
Swim swam swum
Good piece Roberto 👍
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Oh, I didn’t know that about Brazil – so interesting @victorpereira and I’m so happy to hear that you have found the Irish to be so welcoming and non-judgmental. Not so happy to hear that you have experienced discrimination online, but I’m glad it doesn’t bother you.
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Yes, that’s exactly right for the present perfect!
(irregular verbs … they are a pain indeed! Good you are paying attention to them!)
